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Note : I swear (although it’s bad to swear
) it wasn’t my intention to engage in self-serving puffery or boastfulness, but Bunso just did something way cool. So cool in fact that I had to re-post it in its entirety, no explanatory preface needed (except these breaths that I’m wasting now)
. By the time I’ve finished posting I will have found a picture of the author somewhere here, hope you enjoy it (his work
) as much as I have, thanks!]
I made a Poem as my project for my Filipino 11 class (
Panitikan) I want you guys to read it and rate it from 1 to 10, with 1 being the lowest and 10 the highest just to expect what grade my teacher might give me 😀 God bless! P.S be brutally honest.
Pilipinas
-Brent B
Pilipinas ang ating bayang minamahal at
Bayang kailan ma’y di magkukulang sa dangal
Panahon pa ng ating mga ninuno
Sa atin ‘to, satin’ mga Pilipino

Ang ‘Perlas ng Silanganan”Ay puno ng karangalan
At kailan ma’y di nawalan ng kagitingan
Ating inang bayang handa nating ipaglaban
Pilipinas ay puno ng kayamanan

Nandito lahat ng ating kailangan
Ang tubig at mga pagkain
Kay dami sa ating lupain
Maghanap-hanap ka lamang
Ito’y iyong makakamtan

Sa kasalukuyan tayo ay moderno
Bumuti ang buhay ng lahat ng tao
Puno ang bayan ng pagbabago
Gawa na din nating mga tao

Ngunit itong ating tahanan
Tila ating hinuhubaran
Tayo’s nasa daan patungo sa kaunlaran
Kasama nito’y pagkasira ng kalikasan

Tayong mga tao’y di na natuto
Noon pa man ay wala ng respeto
Ang kalikasan ay ating ginago
Pati mga hayop tinarantado
Sabi natin tayong mga tao’y matatalino
Kelan ba natin to gagamitin para sa mundo

Ang Pilipinas, inabuso ng mananakop
Wari ito ay binastos at tinanggalan pa ng saplot
Ang mga anak nito’y ginalit at tinakot
Inalila, sinaktan tinrato masahol pa sa hayop

Ngayon tayo nga ay malaya
Diwa naman natin ay sira
Kapangyarihan ay hawak ng iilan
Karamihan pa dito ay mayayaman
Ninanakawan ang kaban ng bayan

Mga mahihirap ay walang laban
Kaya ang ating bayan ay puno ng kahirapan
Sari-sari nating problema ay di’ maagapan
Mga politiko walang tigil sa pagkurakot
Di’ titigil hanngang lahat ay kanilang nahakot

Tayong Mga Pilipino ay nananatiling matatag
Mga Pilipino ay may sipag at tiyaga
Tayo ay babangon mula sa pagkakadapa
Daan patungong kinabukasan tayo ang maglalatag

Kailangan lang natin ay pagtitiwala
Tiwala sa ating mga kapwa
Mga problema ay mawawala
Mga isip natin ay huwag nating isara
Ang bayan natin ay puno ng pag-asa
Dahil bawat bukas ay bagong umaga.
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Hope you enjoyed it! just comment your rating please. It would be much appreciated 😀 Thanks!
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Thanks for reading, and in case you’re wondering, he gets it entirely from his mother. 🙂
Noel
pre…makahabag damdamin ang sulat mo bro…super like men!!! nice one!!
maraming salamat Nors, coming from you it means a lot ! Love ko Japchae even from way back dahil favorite sya ng boss ko, i will ask my wife to try it, with help from you 😉
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I definitely like the way the poem was written. The words are precise, simple and very comprehensible to plain readers, not to mention the message of the poem. Congratulations to your son and to you and your spouse of course.
Thank you very much Alan, very educational and innovative Facebook page that you have started, may I ask that the author of the poem (brent06191995@gmail.com) be added to your page? I will make sure he gets your comment 🙂
makatang makata. 10 for me. =)
anyone who can write in tagalog is tops in my book dahil nakakanosebleed ito for me na bisaya.
not just that, but the message of this poem is so real and for a generation who i thought did not care much, this speaks volumes of the kind of national pride your son have. very in touch siya sa sign of the times and what is happening around him. this i think he gets from you. congrats.
maayong hapon Chichi and you said it exactly, although it sounds much better coming from you 🙂 I will make sure to tell him, and though I don’t want to grab credit where it’s not due, I think he has done quite well for himself. Thank you very much, I miss our exchanges and God bless you and your family this Christmas!
Wow, nakakaiyak ang content, Noel. Ganda ng pagkasulat; very contemporary Tagalog. 10 rating for me, but I’m not a Tagalog nor a makata. He got it from his mom, not you?? He got it both sides then, walang ligtas! Congrats to your son and to his proud parents.
🙂 Thanks Ka Joy, probably the later generation and its “evolved” Tagalog comes out in the poem. Neither am I as comfortable in Tagalog, but since his mother, coming from Infanta Quezon, is a natural Tagalog speaker, it must have rubbed off on him. Thanks for the kind praise ! I hope you have a wonderful Christmas with friends and loved ones! I will surely tell him about your response, maraming salamat and mabuhay Pilipinas!
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